So We Did A Blog - Critique Please... Espeically Rochard !

[BittieBucks]

Ok we got our first blog up... still populating it and wondering if there are "bits" we're missing ???

http://blog.victoriasummers.com/

Discuss please ;)

[mikeet]

Still needs more big titties

[candyflip]

Those posts have hardly any written content.

[DBS.US]

Looks clean, big fonts make it easy to read. Nice work

[Supz]

you can easily change the colors of the fonts and so forth to match the header in the theme editor under the stylesheet. Only takes a couple of minutes but would probably look better then the basic wordpress colors.

[Highest Def]

Change the permalink structure NOW. Use Custom > /%category%/%postname%/

Definitely write more juicy text, and include links. I couldn't even find the girls website without just editing the url myself.

[Highest Def]

There's also no reason to link the pics to the full size picture when they are already full size in the post.. link the pics directly to the tour. If you want that thing optimized, contact me. 648457862. I can do it for a lot cheaper than you probably expect.

[AmeliaG]

Def link the pics to the tour. If affiliates are going to mostly syndicate the RSS, the SEO on permalinks and such is non-essential, but more text would be a plus.

[BittieBucks]

Thanks guys... we're real new to this... so it's a learning process Would be really cool (if you guys dont mind) to both say what to change, but also why so we can have a better understanding of why we're doing it

[BittieBucks]

I am guessing by "more text" this is for SEO purposes, so loads of mentioning big tits and boobs ? and her site name ect ?

[AzteK]

It's a great start! I'd like to see more content...

[loreen]

The blog has no title

[BittieBucks]

Originally Posted by loreen

The blog has no title

Are we talking meta tags ? As I said we're new to this

[TheSenator]

add this plugin to make your blog extremely fast.

W3 Total Cache http://wordpress.org/extend/plugins/w3-total-cache/

[Monique Niccole]

Some of these have already been mentioned, but I'll go ahead and say them again.

1) Change the permalink structure so that you get some keywords in the post url
2) Link the big pics to a tour
3) More text on each post
4) Better post titles -- for instance, Yes, We're Posers could have better been called "Me and Brook Little are Posers"
5) Add more categories with girls names and/or descriptive keywords
6) Edit your About page
7) Link to a site in each post -- for instance, No Tan Lines doesn't have a link to anywhere
8) I would make the banner spot in the right sidebar a rotating banner spot with more than one ad queued

The usefulness of the Tweetmeme and FB share buttons is debatable. I've found that people aren't likely to share links they come across on a porn site -- especially on Facebook

Something more effective is having a Victoria Summers Twitter profile and using WP to Twitter to push each update to the profile. It really works best if there is real Tweeting on the Victoria Summers profile though.

[candyflip]

Originally Posted by BittieBucks

I am guessing by "more text" this is for SEO purposes, so loads of mentioning big tits and boobs ? and her site name ect ?

It's more to entice the surfers and get them to purchase, in this case. SEO benefits are secondary.

[BittieBucks]

I really really appreciate the time everyone is taking in this post... we're going to impliment these changes tomorrow... so keep them coming

[Forkbeard]

Your text is so old-school pornographer it's embarrassing.

Nobody is going to believe it is written by your model. The deliberate bad grammar and poor spelling and bubbly air-head stuff just screams "pumped out by a greasy fifty-year old male misogynist with a low opinion of women."

That may sell to men with similar attitudes, but you'll piss off women and (this part is important) men who actually like them.

So, when you go to improve your text, if you're going to fake-write like the model, give her a human voice and pretend that she graduated high school.

[BittieBucks]

Originally Posted by Forkbeard

Your text is so old-school pornographer it's embarrassing.

Nobody is going to believe it is written by your model. The deliberate bad grammar and poor spelling and bubbly air-head stuff just screams "pumped out by a greasy fifty-year old male misogynist with a low opinion of women."

That may sell to men with similar attitudes, but you'll piss off women and (this part is important) men who actually like them.

So, when you go to improve your text, if you're going to fake-write like the model, give her a human voice and pretend that she graduated high school.

Oh dear... well I guess I couldnt expect everyone to be as polite... I will keep that in mind, alas she's very blonde and not very good at putting words into sentences

[BittieBucks]

Bumpity for any last pointers

[DamianJ]

I think the copy writing point is valid. You're not fooling anyone. And if your first point of contact trying to sell to someone is an obvious lie, maybe people will not be so interested.

Write for surfers, not for google. Imagine you liked big tits and found a blog about big tits that gave you free tit pics and stories/info/news...

Fleshbot is "just" a blog.

What if you made the fleshbot for big boobs...

[fris]

looks like you didnt put much work into it, just a bg, and a header

[Frasier]

Major issues :
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No <title> tag
No <H1> tag

of less importance but still needed :
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No meta name keywords
No meta name description

I agree the writing style is horrible. Change and write in second person. More words per post as well.

[papill0n]

to have a successful blog you need to write something worth reading

[Agent 488]

[Agent 488]

you naughty boys.

[Si]

I noticed "bittie bucks" mentioned on there off the bat.

Is this geared torward webmasters? If not, why mention your program? Big NO NO IMO!

[zuffa]

Not so sure about some of the advice in this thread. Rochard, the guys from MP and I'll include myself are doing just fine with blogs that have little to no text.

If you are visual media heavy no one is going to read anyway.

You do need to SEO this thing and link the images to your tour.

[izzynew]

Your blog looks good, but you definitely need a title. The blog shows up in the toolbar as http://blog.victoriasummers.com/, when it should show up as Victoria Summers, or Victoria Summers Blog.

The first link in your source is to the blog header image, rather than your title, as it should be, and the image doesn't even have an alt tag, which doesn't help.

The second link in your source is to 'Skip to content' and the third one is to 'home'.
You really need the first link to be to your title, preferably in H1 tags.

Others have already discussed the rest. whether you go for lots of written text or not is debatable, but it does help. It probably wouldn't be quite as important if you add alt tags to images , and have quite a few posts.
The images are for the surfer, but you do need some text (seen or in the source code) for the bots.

[V_RocKs]

Take an SAT course on where to put a fucking comma.

[garce]

Originally Posted by V_RocKs

Take an SAT course on where to put a fucking comma.

Ouch!

Hire me to maintain your blogs.

[BittieBucks]

Originally Posted by zuffa

Not so sure about some of the advice in this thread. Rochard, the guys from MP and I'll include myself are doing just fine with blogs that have little to no text.

If you are visual media heavy no one is going to read anyway.

You do need to SEO this thing and link the images to your tour.

I have to say I agree with you on this one... I dont want to read a book, it's a diary entry... I think as long as it has good pics, and then a short sharp teasing text then it works...

I know Rochards doing very well with such Blogs... someone else pointed out the text is suppose to encourage the surfer to sign up for the site... so I would think teasy text would work... would love to see one of these guys who are harping on about how transparent it is to write a entry... wonder how they would make it so believable lol !

I'll get Victoria to write one, I have a sneeky feeling it wont be far from whats up now lol... she is portraying a character, and that is part of her character... she is suppose to be a teen girl next door schoolgirl gone bad ! It's fantasy people remember ;)

And yes I know it sounds I am going off on one when I asked for the critique... but I dont have to agree with all the feedback... but hey if those critising want to link me to their blogs to show me the error of my ways please feel free, would love to see your work

[CaptainHowdy]

Me likey ...

[CaptainWolfy]

Hit me up i will SEO it for you for free!

[Forkbeard]

I'll be more polite this time while making the same point.

Nobody likes to be lied to.

It's really rare for models to actually blog.

Thus, a blog written in the model's voice is a tricky thing to do right. And it's risky to do it wrong.

You're doing it pretty wrong, because not only are you transparent, but you're choosing a model persona that is a very tired stereotype of a dumb blonde who giggles her way through life.

That can be cute when it's real. When it's transparently fake, it's not cute. A model who can't spell may be sexy. A pornographer who can't spell is just LAZY.

Meanwhile I am laughing quite a lot at "would love to see one of these guys who are harping on about how transparent it is to write a entry... wonder how they would make it so believable lol !"

For one thing, where did you get the idea that the only way to write a blog entry is to pretend it is the model speaking? It doesn't have to be "believable" if you are commenting on the model or the photography in some other, more natural voice. Like, say, your own. That makes it much easier.

[DamianJ]

Originally Posted by BittieBucks

I'll get Victoria to write one, I have a sneeky feeling it wont be far from whats up now lol...

Would you get her to do your video editing? Would you get her to do the CSS?

Why would you get her to write the blog?

Hire a copy writer.

[BittieBucks]

Originally Posted by Forkbeard

I'll be more polite this time while making the same point.

Nobody likes to be lied to.

It's really rare for models to actually blog.

Thus, a blog written in the model's voice is a tricky thing to do right. And it's risky to do it wrong.

You're doing it pretty wrong, because not only are you transparent, but you're choosing a model persona that is a very tired stereotype of a dumb blonde who giggles her way through life.

That can be cute when it's real. When it's transparently fake, it's not cute. A model who can't spell may be sexy. A pornographer who can't spell is just LAZY.

Meanwhile I am laughing quite a lot at "would love to see one of these guys who are harping on about how transparent it is to write a entry... wonder how they would make it so believable lol !"

For one thing, where did you get the idea that the only way to write a blog entry is to pretend it is the model speaking? It doesn't have to be "believable" if you are commenting on the model or the photography in some other, more natural voice. Like, say, your own. That makes it much easier.

See how much better you reply when your sober

I will get the model to have a dash at it and see if she comes up with something better...

But to some degree I still dont agree with you (oh no the drama) guys want the dumb blonde... yes the persona as been done to death... probably cause it works ;)

I replied to a few member emails in the same manner, and the guys loved it... they are buying custom sets on the strength of it... so obviously not so bad lol ;)

[BittieBucks]

Originally Posted by DamianJ

Would you get her to do your video editing? Would you get her to do the CSS?

Why would you get her to write the blog?

Hire a copy writer.

Dude seriously... I have seen some of the stuff "copy writers" come out with... I dont see it as any better as whats up so far...

Seem's as many people dont like the text other's do... go figure... I will get the girl to do the job, see if she comes up with anything better...

But the other more constructive input will most definetly be implimented

[2intense]

Originally Posted by mchtye

Still needs more big titties

[Robocrop]

1. Optimize the site for humans and search engines.
2. I suggest 200-300 char's per post.
3. Put a <---More--> after H1 and H2 for page views.

If needed I can do all this for $200 and your blog will actually lift off.

Goodluck!

[Rochard]

Looks like a good start. Need some more text!

I like how it's all candid!

[Agent 488]

hire fat foo to write three blog posts per week and forget about it.

[BittieBucks]

Next newb question... how do you link a pic to the tour

Do I change it in HTML or the word press admin ?

[BittieBucks]

ignore that... worked it out already

[BittieBucks]

Ok all main pics are now linked Done more text, posts are around 100 words each one... does that sound good ? More links too... and we're waiting for one of our guys to add banners down the side for our sites...

Regards the text... spoke to Victoria and she likes the text (as do I) she feels her entries would be pretty much the same, I guess she is just a big boobed blonde lol... sorry to disagree with those that felt it was wrote by a fat 50 year old... it was actually wrote by a fat 43 year old lol...

Other changes are being made when out tech returns tomorrow